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Prompt

Text Asset 1

1. Information technology is at the core of how you do your business and how your business model itself evolves.
2. The bottom line is that any business should be a meritocracy. The best and brightest. Period.
3. The change I want to see is a start-up environment where everyone feels welcome and safe; where sexual harassment or discrimination will not impede great talent from producing great impact.
4. A business that makes nothing but money is a poor business.

Essay

Text Asset 2

With the increasingly rapid rate of progression of contemporary society, focus on innovation and the desire for individuals to be their ‘own boss’ has driven the exponential increase in the number of created businesses in recent times. Though each and every one of them has dreams of owning a successful business, it remains a fact that the majority of businesses fail to achieve enough success to become a long-term, financially stable business, with many failing in their first year. Factors such as the extent of which the advances in technology are utilised in business operations, and meritocratic ideals which reward the most capable individuals are currently prioritised. Yet these factors alone are insufficient. A business that only profit or performance risks undermining the human foundations on which long term success depends on.

Information technology currently sits on the forefront of business models, shaping not only operation efficiency but strategic direction. The development and implementation of Artificial Intelligence only further urge prioritisation of technology as companies race to attain the latest technology and outperform their competitors. Similarly, the opinion that companies should function solely as a meritocracy reflects the desire to reward talent and maximise productivity. While these priorities can drive innovation and growth, particularly in global markets, implementing them without reflection may narrow opportunities for success and overlook structural barriers that prevent additional talent from emerging.

True meritocracy cannot exist in environments where individuals feel unsafe of excluded. Discrimination and harassment can cause many issues such as distorting assessment of ability, silencing voices, minimising individual creativity and encouraging conformity. Thus, capable people who can further business aims are driven away. As such, creating workplaces where all employees feel welcome is not only an ethical priority but a practical necessity. Inclusion enables organisations to draw a greater pool of ideas and experiences, strengthening creativity and innovation in an increasingly competitive environment.

Ultimately, businesses that define success solely in financial terms limit their opportunity and reveal their limited understanding in their social role. Profit is essential for survival but should not be the only focus. Organisations also shape the community, culture, and individual lives. Those who recognise ethical responsibilities beyond finance are more likely to earn community trust, sustain engagement, and produce a meaningful impact over time. In balancing technological advancement, merit, and inclusion, businesses move beyond self-interest models of success to one that is both successful and humane.

Expected Output

Field	Expected Value	Match Threshold	In Overall Rate
`body.paragraphs.feedback` string	null	—	No
`body.paragraphs.score` string	null	—	No
`conclusion.feedback` string	null	—	No
`conclusion.score` string	null	—	No
`introduction.feedback` string	null	—	No
`introduction.score` string	null	—	No
`overall.feedback` string	null	—	No
`overall.score` string	Okay	—	Yes

Prompt Runs Performance (2 runs)

Match rates shown are for this specific item, not overall run averages.

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v1 - AI Instructions For Essay Analysis V1
Gemini 2.5 Pro

Temp: 0.0 Max: 8,192

100.0% 1/1 fields

8,404 tokens 2026-02-01 01:08 View Full Run →

	Field & Match Criterion	Expected Output	Generated Output	Evaluation Metrics
—	`body.paragraphs.feedback` string Not evaluated	null	The body paragraphs are the weakest section of the essay. The structure does not consistently follow the TEEL (Topic sentence, Evidence, Elaboration, Link) model. The first body paragraph, for instance, lacks a clear, argumentative topic sentence and reads more like a general discussion than a focused argument. The second body paragraph is better structured with a clearer topic sentence, but both paragraphs suffer from a significant lack of evidence. Arguments are made logically but are not substantiated with societal-level examples, studies, or historical context, which makes them feel like unsupported assertions. To improve, focus on dedicating each paragraph to a single, clear argument and backing it up with specific evidence before elaborating on its significance.	Not evaluated
—	`body.paragraphs.score` string Not evaluated	null	Poor	Not evaluated
—	`conclusion.feedback` string Not evaluated	null	The conclusion effectively performs its function. It begins by clearly restating the essay's main contention in a new way, avoiding simple repetition. It then successfully synthesizes the main themes discussed—balancing technology, merit, and inclusion—before offering a powerful and humane final thought. The structure is logical and concise, providing a satisfying end to the essay by reinforcing the core message that a successful business must also be a humane one.	Not evaluated
—	`conclusion.score` string Not evaluated	null	Good	Not evaluated
—	`introduction.feedback` string Not evaluated	null	Your introduction is well-structured and effective. It starts with a relevant contextual hook, clearly establishes a nuanced contention that a business focused only on profit undermines its own success, and briefly outlines the arguments to be discussed. The contention is particularly strong as it thoughtfully synthesizes the themes from the prompts. The paragraph is also concise and clear, successfully setting the stage for the rest of the essay without wasting words. It correctly identifies the key components of a strong introduction.	Not evaluated
—	`introduction.score` string Not evaluated	null	Good	Not evaluated
—	`overall.feedback` string Not evaluated	null	This essay presents a thoughtful and coherent contention, framed by a good introduction and a solid conclusion. However, the overall quality is brought down by the weakness in the body paragraphs, which are the most critical component of a GAMSAT essay. The arguments in the body lack clear structure and are not supported by evidence, which prevents the essay from being truly persuasive. To improve, you should continue to formulate nuanced contentions as you have done here. Your main focus for improvement should be on the body paragraphs: 1) Strictly adhere to the TEEL structure for each paragraph. 2) Ensure each paragraph has one clear argument. 3) Substantiate your claims with specific, real-world evidence to add weight and credibility to your analysis.	Not evaluated
✓	`overall.score` string Match: Exact equality	Okay	Okay	Exact Match

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